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Post by Robbie Ferrari on Feb 1, 2011 1:09:50 GMT -5
I'm going to watch American History X, brb.
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Post by Not Super Pollo on Feb 1, 2011 1:10:34 GMT -5
I actually go by the saying "people never use enough quotes". And Ward being punished for using quotes that he never cited is just filibuster.
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Post by Robbie Ferrari on Feb 1, 2011 1:12:56 GMT -5
Guy is just a footnote on the book report of life.
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Post by "The Cult Classic" Rachel Cole on Feb 27, 2011 14:26:49 GMT -5
After reading you latest RP, I got to say that you just need to read more. Read books, other people's RPs, short stories and what not. There seems to be a lack of understanding of structure and real people talk and act in real life. Reading alot helps a person's writing more than they know. Slowly you'll begin to adapt what is going in your head and you'll have a better understanding on writing an effective RP.
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Post by Not El Hijo de Pollo on Feb 27, 2011 19:42:04 GMT -5
And by the way, Your little graphic there should have said you were the "Archangel of Anarchy" not "Archangel of Anarchist"...
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Post by Justin Partial on Feb 27, 2011 19:47:21 GMT -5
Read over your work before you post it... That helps.
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Post by "The Cult Classic" Rachel Cole on Feb 27, 2011 19:50:06 GMT -5
Or pluralize Anarchist... that would kind of work, but I admit, having it be "Anarchy" would work better.
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Post by Robbie Ferrari on Feb 27, 2011 19:54:55 GMT -5
You need to watch the capitalization. You are missing a lot of important ones, you capitalized the R in Ring but not in Revolution. Also in International Championship.
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Post by Sarah Twilight on Feb 27, 2011 20:10:17 GMT -5
I am going to echo Robbie's feedback. Capitalization and proper punctuation can definitely help. Just a pause, a comma, or even italics or CAPS can help to show some emotion, or emphasis. It was a good RP. You had purpose and kept to the point. I would just say to try and format it a little better and you're heading in the right direction.
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Post by Robbie Ferrari on Feb 27, 2011 20:15:02 GMT -5
Italics would help for what I think your first two paragraphs were, and that was talking to yourself. It just looked like you were talking but didn't put your "Matt Ward:" at the front. It was hard to tell.
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Post by Justin Partial on Feb 27, 2011 20:32:03 GMT -5
And don't change your pic base every day.
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Post by Robbie Ferrari on Mar 11, 2011 18:15:58 GMT -5
YOU HAVE A SHIFT KEY, USE IT
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