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Post by CEO Harvey McCutchins on Feb 6, 2011 16:31:18 GMT -5
Feedback for The Scorpion's RPs here.
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Post by The Scorpion on Feb 6, 2011 17:01:11 GMT -5
To all,
I have posted my debut/match rp for the Television Title Battle Royal in the appropriate thread. I was wondering if I could get some feedback from my peers on this. For what's worth, expect some karma in exchange for any feedback provided.
Thanks, Adam (The Scorpion)
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Post by "The Divine Chaos" Galen Ronan on Feb 6, 2011 17:36:39 GMT -5
I have a question.
Why is it that every time I roleplay for a battle royale someone better comes along? T_T
Nah, I'm kiddin'. (Kindof) It was a good read, and the only problem I really had was pacing and perhaps some more paragraph-seperation 'n' such.
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Post by The Scorpion on Feb 6, 2011 17:43:12 GMT -5
And.....exalted. Thanks for the feedback man.
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Post by The Scorpion on Feb 14, 2011 21:28:28 GMT -5
Everyone, I have posted an rp for the TV Title Match. I decided to use the forum to showcase the rigidity and borderline psychosis of the character while also integrating it into his desires for revenge. I would greatly appreciate some feedback. As always, feedback = karma.
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Post by "The Divine Chaos" Galen Ronan on Feb 14, 2011 21:31:06 GMT -5
I'm likin' it. Much more readable than your previous RP, better spacing and doesn't look all mashe together. Should be an interesting competition... I look forward to it. (And I also hope beyond all hope you don't do a second RP. <.<)
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Post by The Scorpion on Feb 14, 2011 21:45:58 GMT -5
Consider yourself exalted. Thanks again for the feedback. May the best man win.
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Post by The Scorpion on Feb 21, 2011 19:09:17 GMT -5
Usual deal everyone. I'd greatly appreciate some feedback for my rp this week.
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Post by Sarah Twilight on Feb 22, 2011 14:59:56 GMT -5
I am definitely a fan of the descriptiveness. There's nothing quite like setting a tone for a character and you accomplish this very well. The psychotic, seemingly misguided worship to the Lord is so far very interesting. I haven't quite placed yet whether he is a sinister hypocrite who will use the Lord's word for some twisted, almost cult like propaganda or if he is just seriously taking his faith far too literally. Currently it seems to be the latter.
All in all, your RP was very interesting and had me intrigued with the character. Religion is usually a taboo subject for most as it can be difficult to work with. But you have used it very effectively and maintaining a unique character rather than the classic "holy roller." I look forward to more from you.
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Post by The Scorpion on Feb 22, 2011 19:31:15 GMT -5
Much obliged for the feedback Sarah. It's somewhat scarce to come by in ROR, so it's definitely appreciated. Getting an outside perspective on the character helps me ponder future directions for him.
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Post by The Scorpion on Mar 8, 2011 0:45:20 GMT -5
My PPV roleplay is posted. Since this is a PPV, I decided to try and be a bit more in-depth and add some additional layers to the character such as motivations and feelings. Any feedback would be most appreciated.
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Post by The Scorpion on Mar 14, 2011 20:55:58 GMT -5
Same request as usual. I haven't gotten any feedback in a while so I'd REALLY appreciate any input from my peers. I always like to know how well the character is coming off to others. Help a man out if you could.
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Post by Rob Williams on Mar 14, 2011 21:24:55 GMT -5
I don't see anything wrong really--except I would/will hate RPing against someone like you...your RPs are long and intimidating LOL.
Just joking, you make me wanna step my game up which I will do so...keep up the good work is alls I will say about you.
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Post by The Scorpion on Mar 14, 2011 22:05:44 GMT -5
Ask and and ye shall receive apparently. Many thanks Rob. Consider your karma boosted to 2.
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